[ALAC] ACTION: Draft of the ALAC comments to be sent to the CCWG

[Timothy Denton]

Alan:
Sometimes to understand a document I have to edit it.

If any of these edits are of assistance to you and others, good. Their 
purpose was merely to put into correct or comprehensible English at some 
points where the draft text was not grammatical,  or idiomatic, or 
where, in one case, the text was incoherent.

TMD


On 12/14/2015 1:19 AM, Alan Greenberg wrote:
> The IANA Issues WG met on Friday to discuss possible issue on the 
> CCWG-Accountability 3rd draft proposal.
>
> The CCWG documents can be founds at 
> https://community.icann.org/pages/viewpage.action?pageId=56145016.
>
> The document discussed at the IANA-Issues meeting can be found linked 
> to the Agenda Item 3 of https://community.icann.org/x/PIdlAw 
> <https://community.icann.org/x/PIdlAw> (entitled *Review of Proposal 
> and Potential ALAC Positions*).
>
> We need to send a summary of our comments to the CCWG today (in time 
> for a CCWG meeting on Tuesday at 06:00 UTC). The attached document 
> summarizes the issues as modified by the discussion during the 
> teleconference.
>
> Please send any comments in sufficient time for me to integrate them 
> (as appropriate) into the documents. In particular, is there anything 
> here that is counter to the tone or detail of the discussion?
>
> The Final Public Comment must be submitted no later than 21 December. 
> It will no doubt closely follow the attached document, but may well 
> include other issues that come to light over the next days.
>
> As ALL ALAC member will be asked to vote on the Public Comments and 
> will ultimately have to decide whether to ratify the CCWG Proposal, 
> this is both important and time-sensitive.
>
> To the extent that is possible and you feel appropriate, please 
> involve your RALOs.
>
> Alan
>
>
>
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