[ALAC] Analysis of AoC Whois Report Recommendations

[Evan Leibovitch]

On 11 September 2012 12:19, Alan Greenberg <alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca> wrote:

However, on re-reading our statement, I find that it is less than
> clear. Or gramatically correct.
>
> I suggest replacing it with:
>
> >Perhaps, but not obvious.  Changes would likely be the result of
> >bilateral negotiations between the parties and ICANN. *If*
> >registries and/or registrars will need to take action, such as for
> >increased reporting, policy development may be required.
>

Nice catch by Sala. Great edit by Alan. I'm very comfortable with the
result, good to send IMO.

- Evan




>
> So thanks for causing me to reread it!  :-)
>
> Alan
>
> At 11/09/2012 05:49 AM, Salanieta T. Tamanikaiwaimaro wrote:
> >Dear Alan,
> >
> >Just a suggestion for minor edits. This is particularly when
> >rendering advice to the Board, where we use language like "perhaps"
> >can communicate "indecision" or "ambiguity" and we need to use firm
> >and clear language because we are advising them.
>
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