[ALAC] Analysis of AoC Whois Report Recommendations

[Alan Greenberg]

:-)


At 11/09/2012 12:56 PM, Evan Leibovitch wrote:


>On 11 September 2012 12:19, Alan Greenberg 
><<mailto:alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca>alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca> wrote:
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>However, on re-reading our statement, I find that it is less than
>clear. Or gramatically correct.
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>I suggest replacing it with:
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> >Perhaps, but not obvious.  Changes would likely be the result of
> >bilateral negotiations between the parties and ICANN. *If*
> >registries and/or registrars will need to take action, such as for
> >increased reporting, policy development may be required.
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>
>Nice catch by Sala. Great edit by Alan. I'm very comfortable with 
>the result, good to send IMO.
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>- Evan
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>So thanks for causing me to reread it!  :-)
>
>Alan
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>At 11/09/2012 05:49 AM, Salanieta T. Tamanikaiwaimaro wrote:
> >Dear Alan,
> >
> >Just a suggestion for minor edits. This is particularly when
> >rendering advice to the Board, where we use language like "perhaps"
> >can communicate "indecision" or "ambiguity" and we need to use firm
> >and clear language because we are advising them.
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