[ALAC] Analysis of AoC Whois Report Recommendations

[Salanieta T. Tamanikaiwaimaro]

Dear Alan,

Just a suggestion for minor edits. This is particularly when rendering
advice to the Board, where we use language like "perhaps" can communicate
"indecision" or "ambiguity" and we need to use firm and clear language
because we are advising them.

Also the summary is good but if you footnote it or create some kind of
appendage, it gives the Board the option to read about the rationale behind
it since we won't be there etc. You are absolutely right, given that the
Board will no have hundreds of pages to go through in terms of meeting
brief, we would want to give them something succint and concise. At the
same time to enable them to read the rationale behind the analysis, you can
also create the appendage of footnotes etc.

Otherwise, excellent document. Again, thank you for an excellent job!

Best Regards,
Sala

On Tue, Sep 11, 2012 at 5:54 PM, Alan Greenberg <alan.greenberg at mcgill.ca>wrote:

> Olivier, attached is a re-worked version of the Whois report
> recommendations. I have made some adjustments based on ALAC feedback -
> specifically that the statements be made clearer regarding whether GNSO
> action is required prior to the Board initiating action. I have also added
> a short preamble making the overall assessment clear - of the 16
> recommendations, 12 do not require GNSO action, 3 may at a later stage, and
> only one requires new policy before the Board can take substantive action.
>
> Note that the Board workshop begins on Wednesday, so presuming that this
> document is satisfactory, it should be transmitted to the Board today.
>
> Alan
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