[Euro-board] [EURO-Discuss] EURALO flyer

[Annette Muehlberg]

again, thanks to heidi and scott.

euralo flyer:
agree with wolf's comments!
also, euralo member organisations should be described not named.

agree with heike's comments except one: i would not replace civil rights by human rights.

if we have a part "what others say about us" these others should be others and not members of EURALO (like christopher and olivier)

best greetings
annette

> -----Ursprüngliche Nachricht-----
> Von: "Adam Peake" <ajp at glocom.ac.jp>
> Gesendet: 21.08.09 13:18:14
> An:  "euro-board at atlarge-lists.icann.org" <euro-board at atlarge-lists.icann.org>
> CC: Scott Pinzon <scott.pinzon at icann.org>
> Betreff: Re: [Euro-board] [EURO-Discuss] EURALO flyer


> Heidi, Scott, thanks very much for this.
> 
> I agree with Wolf's comments.  Also wondered about influence and 
> influencing used in the first and second short paragraphs.  Would it 
> read more comfortably if affect/affecting replaced one of them?  (or 
> some word to replace one of the influences, affecting is all I can 
> think of!)
> 
> Thanks,
> 
> Adam
> 
> 
> 
> At 12:55 PM +0200 8/21/09, Wolf Ludwig wrote:
> >Dear, Heidi, Dessi and all,
> >
> >the message has come through on the EURALO list (and the board list 
> >as well). Thanks a lot, Heidi and Scott, for your final editing what 
> >is short, concise and very well done! There are two minor details 
> >only I would like to suggest - the one to be added, the other to be 
> >changed.
> >
> >(1) On version 4 - final proposed draft, after the 2nd sub-title 
> >"Who we are", second para "Our members include ..."). The variety of 
> >our member ALSes exemplified by "ISOC chapters and consumer groups" 
> >seems rather limited and not very representative. In fact, we have 
> >many civil rights groups among our ALSes. Could we add them (2 words 
> >only ;-) in this enumeration? It would read:
> >"Our members include more than 25 organisations working on 
> >Internet-focused issues, including Internet Society (ISOC) chapters, 
> >civil rights and consumer groups across Europe formed into 
> >individual At-Large Structures."
> >
> >(2) The heading on the testimonials says "What others say about us" 
> >-- in fact, the people quoted (Christopher and Olivier) so far and 
> >the ones asked like Veroniqua, Vittorio, Rena etc. are not "others" 
> >or outsiders but members or people rather close to us. Could we 
> >therefore say "What members say about us" or if we want to put it a 
> >bit more neutral "What people say about us"?
> >
> >Thanks again and kind regards,
> >Wolf
> >
> >
> >  Heidi Ullrich wrote Thu, 20 Aug 2009 11:10:
> >>Dear All,
> >>
> >>The final proposed draft of the EURALO flyer is now available for 
> >>your review: https://st.icann.org/euralo/index.cgi?euralo_flyer. 
> >>Scott  Pinzon and I have tried to incorporate most of the comments 
> >>received as well as develop text that achieves the aims and 
> >>objectives of the flyer, and expresses the policy issues of most 
> >>concern to EURALO, yet remains within a reasonable word limit as 
> >>set out by the dimensions of the flyer.
> >>
> >>As agreed during this week's EURALO call, please could you add your 
> >>comments to the wiki by the end of the day on Friday, 21 August?
> >>
> >>Kind regards,
> >>Heidi
> >>
> >>Heidi Ullrich
> >>Manager, At-Large Regional Affairs
> >>Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN)
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